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Tuesday, February 25, 2014

"Cameron what happened to max?" "He ran into a tree" "really he already did that" I said.  I thought that it must have been bad.  Then a ski-patrol man came over, but max said that he was fine he just lost a contact and he cut his lip and face.
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6 comments:

  1. UnknownFebruary 26, 2014 at 5:48 AM

    i think you have a cool blog.i also think you can write longer

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  2. UnknownFebruary 26, 2014 at 5:48 AM

    I like how you used big words to make it like it was happening.

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  3. UnknownFebruary 26, 2014 at 5:50 AM

    I like how u have dialogue because its important

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  4. UnknownFebruary 26, 2014 at 6:23 AM

    Eric,
    I liked how you used lots of diologe because that is very important. That really happened to Max that musta hurt.

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  5. HelenFebruary 26, 2014 at 6:25 AM

    Good job at adding dialogue but maybe edit it more next time.

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